The Cask of Amontillado Paragraph

Original.

The Cask of Amontillado by Edgar Allan Poe is a chilling account of one man’s determination on getting revenge. Montresor is hell bent on making Fortunado pay for the “thousand injuries” in which was inflicted on him by Fortunado. Montresor accomplishes his revenge by leading his victim into the catacombs. He then chained him up and left him there to rot for half a century. It remains a mystery what Fortunado did to deserve such a heinous death. Whatever the circumstances though still doesn’t justify what Montresor ultimately did to Fortunado. Montresor was a man that sought revenge and in the end, he achieved his wicked goal.

Revised.

The Cask of Amontillado by Edgar Allan Poe is a chilling account of a man’s selfish goal of seeking revenge. Montresor is focused on making Fortunado pay for the “thousand injuries” that have been inflicted upon him by Fortunado. Those “thousand injuries” were never explicitly made clear by Montresor. Nevertheless, Montresor continues with his goal for revenge on Montresor by leading Fortunado into the catacombs. Fortunado then chained him up and left there to rot for half a century. It remains a mystery what Fortunado did to deserve such a grim and heinous death. Whether the circumstances though, it still doesn’t justify what Montresor ultimately did. Montresor was a man obsessed with revenge and in the end, he accomplished his twisted goal.

In my revision, I kept the basics of my paragraph there but I changed a couple minor things. I changed Montresor’s “determination on getting revenge” into his “selfish goal of getting revenge”. I changed that because there wasn’t anything that made it seem like he was determined or that his whole life was leading up to this moment. It just seemed like he was being cruel and selfish and he wanted to exact his revenge. I also added a sentence stating that the “thousand injuries” were never explicitly made clear. I thought it was necessary because it tells the reader more about the circumstances. The rest of the paragraph remained in tact with a couple minor word changes.